Post by ~*Speckles*~ on Jul 26, 2007 9:00:42 GMT -5
This is part of my story, hopefully book someday, called 'The Big Red Barn'. It is going to be different stories based on real happenings in our barn and a dash of imagineation to make it more interesting.
CHAPTER TWO
Preparation was being made for the rescue party that was going to free the captive; nothing more had been said about the bird’s nest in tree number two. Guess had been looking for a way to get into the house, and he finally found one. He heard that the people were going to be cleaning out the basement, which meant that the big door to the basement would be open. The people couldn’t watch all the time, he and Bagheera would be able to slip in and rescue the captive with ease. There was great excitement. Two days after the meeting, Guess and Bagheera were ready. That night, the cats met to discuss everything.
“While you are gone,” said Star, “we will make the barn presentable for our new friend. Bagheera, you’re sure that you remember your way around that house?”
“Yup.”
“Very good. Don’t get lost, that is the worst thing that could happen. Tomorrow morning, you and Guess will be hiding in the bushes nearest the door. As soon as possible after they open the door, get in. And do hurry; it wouldn’t do for you to get locked in. Well, any questions? Then may your claws stay sharp.”
Early the next morning they were in the bushes close to the basement door, ready for anything, except for nothing. The morning passed slowly. Bagheera began to think that Guess had heard wrong. He was about to leave disgusted, when they heard the basement door begin to open. It always amazed them that something so big could open all by itself whenever the people told it to. When it had opened all the way, they sat there in awe. Finally they shook themselves and began to creep closer to the great door. They gulped and slipped quickly, but quietly, into the basement.
“Okay, we’re in.” said Bagheera. “Now what?”
“The stairs. I’ve gotten in here before; there are stairs at the far wall. Then a door at the top. I’m guessing that that is the door into the big house.”
They soon found the stairs and after making sure that no one was coming, they scaled them.
“So far so good.” said Bagheera. “The door isn’t closed all the way, I’ll just…”
“No! Let me open it, I’m bigger, and stronger.”
“Hurry, I hear someone coming!”
Guess pushed up against the door and it swung open. He stepped in and made sure that the coast was clear, then he called to Bagheera and they both ran in and under the couch.
“I didn’t know that there were caves in here.” said Guess wonderingly.
“Pretty cool huh?” said Bagheera. “It’s really soft up on top too. Come on; let’s go up there, we’ll have a better view.”
Guess was spellbound. He had never seen anything like this. He and Bagheera leapt up onto the back of the couch.
“See anything?” asked Guess.
“No. She might be in a different room. Come on!”
“To where?”
“To look in the other rooms.”
“What other rooms?”
“What do you mean ‘what other rooms’? The other rooms. There’s lots of them.”
“Really? Just like this?”
“Not just like this. Come on, we’re wasting time.”
The two jumped off of the couch and headed into another room, the kitchen. They had no luck there either.
“Hmm, now where?” wondered Bagheera.
“What? I thought you said that knew your way around!”
“I did, but it’s been a while, and, well... Let’s try this way.”
“Wait, lets try this way? No way, I’m not trying anything; I don’t want to get lost.”
“You won’t, I’m quite sure of the way now.”
“You’re sure?”
“Yes. This way, down the tunnel, now we just pick a room to search.”
“Okay, let’s search that one there, at the end of the tunnel.”
They went in and jumped onto one of the beds and looked out of the window.
“Wow!” said Guess. “This is crazy! Its so… ow! What’s that?”
While they were looking out of the window, the poor house cat, Cleopatra, had snuck up behind them, pounced onto Guess’s back, and bit.
“Ow! Stop! We’re here to rescue you!” yowled Guess.
“Cleopatra! It’s me Bagheera! Oh, let him go would you? He came with me.”
“What are you doing,” shrieked Cleopatra. “in my bed, in my room, in my house? How dare you common barn cats come in here?”
“Common barn cats?” said Guess. “Common barn cats? I’ll have you know we are valiant warriors, come to rescue you, a lady in distress.”
“Whatever, you are both nutty. Who are you looking for?” demanded Cleopatra.
“Well, you.” said Guess. “We thought that you would like to come and join us in the barn, outside, where you can be free.”
“Outside? I wouldn’t even consider going there. It is so uncivilized.”
“Uncivilized? We should make you come, that way you could see that it is not uncivilized. Yes, you’ll be our captive of war, our…”
“Of course,” said Bagheera. “you don’t have to come.”
“I know I don’t have to. You wouldn’t be able to drag me there.”
Guess growled and crouched ready to fight her, but Bagheera stepped in front of him and quietly reminded him that they couldn’t draw attention to themselves. Guess growled, but acknowledged that it was true. He took a deep breath to cool off. Then he noticed something strange around Cleopatra’s neck.
“What is that, that thing around your neck?”
“What? Oh, that is my necklace that the people got me. Take note of the diamonds on it, they were imported from Italy.”
“Italy huh? How interesting.” said Guess, “Well I guess that since you don’t want to come with us, we should leave.”
“A very good idea.” said Cleopatra, stretching out on the bed.
Just then they heard a loud “BANG”, Guess and Bagheera crouched down in the blankets.
“What was that?” asked Bagheera.
“Oh, just the people fooling about.” Cleopatra yawned. “I suppose that you two know the way out.”
“Yes.”
“Then why are you still here?” she asked, glaring at them.
“We were just leaving.” said Guess.
They jumped off of the bed, and out of the room. They cautiously slipped down the hall, to the door and down the stairs.
“Well that was disappointing.” said Bagheera once they were in the basement.
“And irritating,” said Guess. “all this trouble to come and save her and she bites us, yells at us and calls us common barn cats. How would she like it if I called her a common house cat? If she wasn’t a lady… Umm, Bagheera, where is the door? I thought that is was right here. All that’s here now is this big wall.”
“Oh no! It’s gone! The door is gone! Now we’re going to die!”
“Bagheera, stop it. All that we need to do is tell it to open, that’s what the people do.” Guess turned to the door. “Oh great door! Please open and let us go free!”
Needless to say, nothing happened.
“Hmm,” Bagheera pondered. “maybe there are special words that you need to say for it to open. Like this: Open Sesame!”
Nothing happened.
“We’re all gonna die!!” wailed Bagheera.
“Shh!! Someone’s coming!”
The people had heard Bagheera’s caterwauls, so they came down to let him out, knowing that he had probably snuck in when the doors were open. Once outside they ran back to the barn, it was nearly sunset, hunting time.
“Well, that was close.” commented Bagheera.
“Yes, it was. I guess it’s a good thing you have such a big mouth.”
“You meant that as a good thing right?”
Before Guess could answer, Tigger had spotted them and began shouting, “Bagheera! Guess! You’re all right! You were gone for so long! Where’s the other cat? What was it like?”
Soon Bagheera were surrounded by the cats, answering questions, and telling their story, with embellishments of course. Once everyone was satisfied, they melted into the darkness to hunt.
Princess was probably the best hunter out of all of the cats. Her and Guess were just about tied, and they were both bent on outdoing each other. Princess slid along silently, her quick eyes catching the slightest movement and her ears the faintest sound. She climbed a tree and crept ever so quietly up behind an unsuspecting sparrow; she paused, and then pounced. There was a flurry confusion, and then all was still. She went to the barn and deposited it in the treasury, and then she moved into the woods to catch herself a meal. After feasting on a couple of mice, she went to the creek for a drink. There was water at the barn, but to her the creek’s water tasted better. When she bent down to get a drink, something hit her from the behind and she went sprawling into the water. She jumped up in a fury, and threw herself at a shadow on the bank. There was a scuffle, she pinned the shadow down and looked it in the face. It was Tiger.
“What do you think you’re doing?” Princess said angrily, letting her up.
“Having some fun, it’s not every day that I get to push a mighty hunter into the creek.” Tiger chuckled. “Anyway, I was wondering if we’re still on for the bird nest in tree number two, of course if you’ve chickened out, I can do it myself.”
“I’ve not chickened out. I was beginning to think that you had, since you hadn’t brought it up.”
“Well I haven’t. When do you want to try it?”
“How about tomorrow night? I’ve already eaten tonight.”
“Sounds good. I’ve eaten too. I was going to head back to the barn to get some shut-eye, when I saw you. I followed you here and shoved you into the water. You really should have seen your eyes! They were as big as saucers.” Tiger giggled to herself.
“Well,” said Princess offendedly. “I’m going back to the barn.”
“Aw come on, it was just a joke. Lets not quarrel.”
Princess never could keep a grudge, so the two walked off together to the barn.
I'd love input on this, critisizm is a great way to develop stories.
CHAPTER TWO
Preparation was being made for the rescue party that was going to free the captive; nothing more had been said about the bird’s nest in tree number two. Guess had been looking for a way to get into the house, and he finally found one. He heard that the people were going to be cleaning out the basement, which meant that the big door to the basement would be open. The people couldn’t watch all the time, he and Bagheera would be able to slip in and rescue the captive with ease. There was great excitement. Two days after the meeting, Guess and Bagheera were ready. That night, the cats met to discuss everything.
“While you are gone,” said Star, “we will make the barn presentable for our new friend. Bagheera, you’re sure that you remember your way around that house?”
“Yup.”
“Very good. Don’t get lost, that is the worst thing that could happen. Tomorrow morning, you and Guess will be hiding in the bushes nearest the door. As soon as possible after they open the door, get in. And do hurry; it wouldn’t do for you to get locked in. Well, any questions? Then may your claws stay sharp.”
Early the next morning they were in the bushes close to the basement door, ready for anything, except for nothing. The morning passed slowly. Bagheera began to think that Guess had heard wrong. He was about to leave disgusted, when they heard the basement door begin to open. It always amazed them that something so big could open all by itself whenever the people told it to. When it had opened all the way, they sat there in awe. Finally they shook themselves and began to creep closer to the great door. They gulped and slipped quickly, but quietly, into the basement.
“Okay, we’re in.” said Bagheera. “Now what?”
“The stairs. I’ve gotten in here before; there are stairs at the far wall. Then a door at the top. I’m guessing that that is the door into the big house.”
They soon found the stairs and after making sure that no one was coming, they scaled them.
“So far so good.” said Bagheera. “The door isn’t closed all the way, I’ll just…”
“No! Let me open it, I’m bigger, and stronger.”
“Hurry, I hear someone coming!”
Guess pushed up against the door and it swung open. He stepped in and made sure that the coast was clear, then he called to Bagheera and they both ran in and under the couch.
“I didn’t know that there were caves in here.” said Guess wonderingly.
“Pretty cool huh?” said Bagheera. “It’s really soft up on top too. Come on; let’s go up there, we’ll have a better view.”
Guess was spellbound. He had never seen anything like this. He and Bagheera leapt up onto the back of the couch.
“See anything?” asked Guess.
“No. She might be in a different room. Come on!”
“To where?”
“To look in the other rooms.”
“What other rooms?”
“What do you mean ‘what other rooms’? The other rooms. There’s lots of them.”
“Really? Just like this?”
“Not just like this. Come on, we’re wasting time.”
The two jumped off of the couch and headed into another room, the kitchen. They had no luck there either.
“Hmm, now where?” wondered Bagheera.
“What? I thought you said that knew your way around!”
“I did, but it’s been a while, and, well... Let’s try this way.”
“Wait, lets try this way? No way, I’m not trying anything; I don’t want to get lost.”
“You won’t, I’m quite sure of the way now.”
“You’re sure?”
“Yes. This way, down the tunnel, now we just pick a room to search.”
“Okay, let’s search that one there, at the end of the tunnel.”
They went in and jumped onto one of the beds and looked out of the window.
“Wow!” said Guess. “This is crazy! Its so… ow! What’s that?”
While they were looking out of the window, the poor house cat, Cleopatra, had snuck up behind them, pounced onto Guess’s back, and bit.
“Ow! Stop! We’re here to rescue you!” yowled Guess.
“Cleopatra! It’s me Bagheera! Oh, let him go would you? He came with me.”
“What are you doing,” shrieked Cleopatra. “in my bed, in my room, in my house? How dare you common barn cats come in here?”
“Common barn cats?” said Guess. “Common barn cats? I’ll have you know we are valiant warriors, come to rescue you, a lady in distress.”
“Whatever, you are both nutty. Who are you looking for?” demanded Cleopatra.
“Well, you.” said Guess. “We thought that you would like to come and join us in the barn, outside, where you can be free.”
“Outside? I wouldn’t even consider going there. It is so uncivilized.”
“Uncivilized? We should make you come, that way you could see that it is not uncivilized. Yes, you’ll be our captive of war, our…”
“Of course,” said Bagheera. “you don’t have to come.”
“I know I don’t have to. You wouldn’t be able to drag me there.”
Guess growled and crouched ready to fight her, but Bagheera stepped in front of him and quietly reminded him that they couldn’t draw attention to themselves. Guess growled, but acknowledged that it was true. He took a deep breath to cool off. Then he noticed something strange around Cleopatra’s neck.
“What is that, that thing around your neck?”
“What? Oh, that is my necklace that the people got me. Take note of the diamonds on it, they were imported from Italy.”
“Italy huh? How interesting.” said Guess, “Well I guess that since you don’t want to come with us, we should leave.”
“A very good idea.” said Cleopatra, stretching out on the bed.
Just then they heard a loud “BANG”, Guess and Bagheera crouched down in the blankets.
“What was that?” asked Bagheera.
“Oh, just the people fooling about.” Cleopatra yawned. “I suppose that you two know the way out.”
“Yes.”
“Then why are you still here?” she asked, glaring at them.
“We were just leaving.” said Guess.
They jumped off of the bed, and out of the room. They cautiously slipped down the hall, to the door and down the stairs.
“Well that was disappointing.” said Bagheera once they were in the basement.
“And irritating,” said Guess. “all this trouble to come and save her and she bites us, yells at us and calls us common barn cats. How would she like it if I called her a common house cat? If she wasn’t a lady… Umm, Bagheera, where is the door? I thought that is was right here. All that’s here now is this big wall.”
“Oh no! It’s gone! The door is gone! Now we’re going to die!”
“Bagheera, stop it. All that we need to do is tell it to open, that’s what the people do.” Guess turned to the door. “Oh great door! Please open and let us go free!”
Needless to say, nothing happened.
“Hmm,” Bagheera pondered. “maybe there are special words that you need to say for it to open. Like this: Open Sesame!”
Nothing happened.
“We’re all gonna die!!” wailed Bagheera.
“Shh!! Someone’s coming!”
The people had heard Bagheera’s caterwauls, so they came down to let him out, knowing that he had probably snuck in when the doors were open. Once outside they ran back to the barn, it was nearly sunset, hunting time.
“Well, that was close.” commented Bagheera.
“Yes, it was. I guess it’s a good thing you have such a big mouth.”
“You meant that as a good thing right?”
Before Guess could answer, Tigger had spotted them and began shouting, “Bagheera! Guess! You’re all right! You were gone for so long! Where’s the other cat? What was it like?”
Soon Bagheera were surrounded by the cats, answering questions, and telling their story, with embellishments of course. Once everyone was satisfied, they melted into the darkness to hunt.
Princess was probably the best hunter out of all of the cats. Her and Guess were just about tied, and they were both bent on outdoing each other. Princess slid along silently, her quick eyes catching the slightest movement and her ears the faintest sound. She climbed a tree and crept ever so quietly up behind an unsuspecting sparrow; she paused, and then pounced. There was a flurry confusion, and then all was still. She went to the barn and deposited it in the treasury, and then she moved into the woods to catch herself a meal. After feasting on a couple of mice, she went to the creek for a drink. There was water at the barn, but to her the creek’s water tasted better. When she bent down to get a drink, something hit her from the behind and she went sprawling into the water. She jumped up in a fury, and threw herself at a shadow on the bank. There was a scuffle, she pinned the shadow down and looked it in the face. It was Tiger.
“What do you think you’re doing?” Princess said angrily, letting her up.
“Having some fun, it’s not every day that I get to push a mighty hunter into the creek.” Tiger chuckled. “Anyway, I was wondering if we’re still on for the bird nest in tree number two, of course if you’ve chickened out, I can do it myself.”
“I’ve not chickened out. I was beginning to think that you had, since you hadn’t brought it up.”
“Well I haven’t. When do you want to try it?”
“How about tomorrow night? I’ve already eaten tonight.”
“Sounds good. I’ve eaten too. I was going to head back to the barn to get some shut-eye, when I saw you. I followed you here and shoved you into the water. You really should have seen your eyes! They were as big as saucers.” Tiger giggled to herself.
“Well,” said Princess offendedly. “I’m going back to the barn.”
“Aw come on, it was just a joke. Lets not quarrel.”
Princess never could keep a grudge, so the two walked off together to the barn.
I'd love input on this, critisizm is a great way to develop stories.
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as for the story, I can't think of anything to add to it ^-^
