Goldenfur, Thunderclan

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Name: Goldenfur
Moons: 20 moons
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Goldenkit

Goldenpaw

Goldenfur

Gender: She-Cat
Clan: ThunderClan
Rank: Warrior
Description:

Goldenfur's bright golden fur shines like the sun. Her fur sparkles when the sunlight hits her . Her mother, Sparklefur says Goldenfur gets the sparkle from her. Goldenfur gets her name from the brightness of her fur. Her odd tabby markings makes her very distinictive and unique, which makes her attractive in an odd sort of way. Her eyes are creamy, and brown like chocolate. Her claws are very sharp. So she is very good in battles. When she was a kit, she wasn't very attractive as now. Silverheart her sister always got attention. Also she is very strong, so she is helpful in battles. Her whiskers are very long, that also is unique. She has a pink nose outlined in silver. Goldenfur's body is very strong, unlike other cats, she has spots on her legs and arms.

Personality:

Goldenfur is one of the mixed emotion cats. One day she's happy and kind. Then a other she's headstrong and challenging. Goldenfur is loyal to her clan and her leader. One day she dreams of being leader herself of her clan. When she was a kit, she wasn't attractive no cat paid attention to Goldenfur, just Silverheart. But when she became a warrior before her sister, Silverheart, cats honor her more. One day she hopes she'll rise to be their leader. Goldenfur doesn't get emotional easily. Mostly, she gets sad, when one of her clanmates die. She will never give up on anything. She also very clever and knows how to make battle plans. When she was a kit, she always tricked her sister. Goldenfur never gets in trouble. Except for the time she went out in the forest, when she was a kit. She cares for kits and always make sure they are protected. But she doesn't want them yet! She wants to do more warrior stuff, before she’s a queen. Sometimes she can get really mad, and challenge the cat. She doesn't like bossy cats. Goldenfur has a great personality!

History:

Goldenkit
When Goldenkit first opened her eyes, she knew it will be a new adventure. A new world she will explore. Silverkit, her sister got the most attention. But Goldenkit didn't care, she was looking foward to go outside the den. 3 moons had past. Goldenkit took her first paw steps to a new adventure. But Silverkit stayed inside the den. It took 1 moon for Silverkit to come out. Goldenkit was very happy to see her. One time Goldenkit and Silverkit went outside the camp. The forest had beautiful sounds. Except her sister complaining about her sore paws.^^
Then she scented fox! "Run!" Goldenkit yowled. Silverkit ran as fast as her sore paws can carry her. That wasn't fast at all. The fox was about to kill her sister. But a black cat pounced on the fox and chased him until Goldenkit could't see the fox any more. The Black cat was her father, Jayfeather. And he didn't look happy. Of course, Goldenkit and Silverkit got punished.
Goldenpaw
6 moons at last! Goldenpaw couldn't wait to become a warrior. She listen to her mentor, Foxclaw. Also she obeyed him and honored him. She was the first one to go to the gathering. Her parents were very proud of her. Jayfeather says she'll be a great warrior. Silverpaw was very jealous of her sister. Goldenpaw had alot attention and she had a mate, Bramblepaw, who dies when they have a battle againist Shadowclan. Goldenpaw gets very sad. Every cat tries to cheer her up, every cat except Silverpaw. Jayfeather and Sparklefur get really mad at Silverpaw. One night, Thunderclan was fighting a pack of foxes. It's a very sad night for Goldenpaw. Her mentor Foxclaw, gets killed at the end of the battle, because of loss of blood. His last words were "Goldenpaw you fought well, tell Autumstar you should be a warrior now. I'll be watching you, from Starclan." And he died.
Goldenfur
Goldenfur is a very young warrior now. Her sister Silverpaw was still training. But she got the opportunity to train her sister. It wasn't long before Silverpaw became a warrior, Silverheart. Goldenfur remembers one memory that will last forever. The night she became a warrior. Before Silverpaw was a warrior, Goldenfur told her this story. " I felt proud of myself tonight. I know Foxclaw watching me. I see his shadow in the moon. He must be proud of me. The moonlight touched my pelt, it felt like a tail over me. I turned around and I saw Foxclaw and other Starclan cats. They had pride in their eyes.
And then it was morning."

Other:

Family tree
(Dads side)Grandpa: Blackclaw
Grandma: Grayflower
(Mom's side)Grandpa: Grayclaw
Grandma: Rainbowpelt
Mother: Sparklefur
Father: Jayfeather
Sister: Silverheart
Friends: Snowclaw, Bluepelt,Orchidwing, Nightriver, and Autumstar

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Is this better

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That is so much better than your old one! Seriously!
I am very proud!
-Huggles-
All you need now is to do complex sentences. For example:

This is your bit:
She gets her name from her golden fur. Her odd tabby markings make her very unique. Also very attractive.

This is my bit:
Sparklefur gets her name from the brightness of her fur. Her odd tabby markings makes her very distinictive and unique, which makes her attractive in an odd sort of way.

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OK

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How about this

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I fix it!

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Accepted : )

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Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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I put some pictures on!